Class Activity 4

Susan Brashear
January 30, 2008


In response to the sample #1, I would suggest not using a question in the job letter. Make bold statements. The way that this person could still use that sentence but turn it around would do so by saying, “I would like to be considered for the position in substitute teaching.” Also, in the education paragraph of the letter, there needs to be some type of example or reference to how her studies have given her experience. The final paragraph is strong but it does not need to have any type of questions to it either. This could say, “At your convenience, please contact me to further go over my qualifications for the position.”

In response to sample #4, the first paragraph is weak and should have more appeal to it. Tell where the job you are responding to is located or how you came about finding the ad for the job. The rest of the letter looks good. They have added in some examples on what their education has taught them and some detailed experience outside the classroom as well. It is also good that she mentions in her final paragraph that her resume is enclosed. Instead of saying, “additional information” she could have said, “At your convenience, please contact me to further go over my qualifications for the position.” I think that stating it this way would make considerations for a job interview for likely.